Jacks writing reflection

Recently in writing we have been learning about descriptive language which is present tense here is an example of past and present tense past tense - i have been to the shops present tense - i am going to the shops. here is an example of some of descriptive writing.
                       

                                               

I am sitting relaxed in my warm cosy damp tent i am drinking smooth luscious tea hard to believe it came out of a teabag i thought, I am feeling the freezing fierce wind it was attacking me like an out of control fire my nose picks up of damp musty sort of scent Everest sits there like a kid that never listened or had input in class.